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Post  McFly(nick) on Sun Dec 07, 2008 12:25 pm

hahahaha yeah..
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Post  kaisthelimit on Tue Dec 09, 2008 10:58 am

OHMYGOSH!!
this is hilarious and exciting!!
Dougie's so funny
he's like a 5 year old LOL
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Post  jaschier on Tue Dec 09, 2008 5:37 pm

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yeah poor leah, she can't even touch danny.. danny did'ny even try hard to see her or to find her, well harry is so funny, his freaking body guard!!!


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Post  nicoleaika on Wed Dec 10, 2008 7:01 pm

people, sorry for late updates.... kagabi sana ipopost ko na kaso bigla kong naalala marami papala akong kailangan gawin sa bahay... and currently wala ako sa bahay.... (netopia, my 3rd, no, 5th home, no, 6th I think)... sorry... and thanks for reading my fic... (to be continue pa rin... sorry talaga)
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Post  McFly(nick) on Thu Dec 11, 2008 5:29 pm

no prob! hehehe

Razz Razz lol!
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Fri Dec 12, 2008 12:39 pm

Chapter 4: Easy?

Dougie: "Wow, if that Danny's your boyfriend, Leah, then he's also the new boss of Harry... then... it will be easier to tell him the truth!" (smiles)
Harry: "And if he already knew the truth, then I'm going back to my ordinary, simple, and ghostless life!" (laughs)
Leah: "Don't worry. We will not haunt you if Danny already knew the truth, if we found my body, and if we found the guy who killed Dougie."
Harry: "Wait.. Did you tell me, the first time we met, that I'm going to help you on finding your body and finding the guy who killed Dougie? No, right?"
Leah: "C'mon! Look, Danny will not believe you if you tell him I'm already dead because you don't have my body."
Harry: "Ok, but your cases only, not his (point Dougie)"
Leah: "What?! No, no... help us too on finding the killer.."
Harry: "I will not..."
Dougie: "It's ok... the only reason why I'm here's to help Leah..."
Harry: (to Leah) "See.. I will not do it..."

When Harry's about to open the door, he remembered something. He remembered that Tom and Danny once heard him talking. And he was so nervous on opening the door. When he opened it, no one's there...

Harry: (sigh) "Thank God no one's here.
Danny: "Harry!"
Harry: "Oh my... Danny, do you hear me again talking to no one?"
Danny: (laughs) "You said it... by the way, my mom called, she told me she wants to meet you at the port. And we're going there now"
Harry: "Oh, ok..."
~~~
Leah: "I forgot."
Dougie: "What?"
Leah: "I don't know where's Kelly now. And Danny, I don't think he, he, he looks like he didn't do anything to look for me."
Dougie: "First, to that Kelly, maybe, she's still scared of the unknown caller. And about the second one, maybe because he can't still recover on what you did to him."
Leah: "Wait, I didn't do anything!"
Dougie: "Ok, let's just say you're on Danny's side and you're still waiting for him to arrive. AND you didn't know he's already dead..."
Leah: "Then??"
Dougie: (smiles) "I forgot."
Leah: "Ok, fine, thanks, it's funny, it's a joke. By the way, where's Harry?"
Dougie: "He went out."
~~~
Harry: "Good day Madam. I'm Harry Judd."
Danny's mum: "Oh, so you are my new body guard?"
Harry: "Yes, ma'am"
Danny's mum: "Let's go, I have some business to make. Would you like to come Danny?"
Danny: "Sure"
Dougie: "Good, Harry joined Danny and his mum's company. What's next?"
Leah: "Follow Harry."

And they followed Harry. Leah, Dougie, Harry, and even Danny were all so surprised to see where Danny's mum's business is located. It's Dark, scary, quiet, and secretive place. And when they entered the place...

Danny: "Wow, I never thought that this place got an entrance like that."
Harry: "I thought..."
Danny's mum: "What? You thought we have an illegal business?"
Harry: "No, no, no ma'am... I also never thought that a theater got a scary entrance."
Danny's mum: (smiles) "Good..."
Leah: "I don't know Danny's mum owned a theater"
Dougie: "Oh...."
Danny: "I don't know you owned a theater..."
Danny's mum: "Your dad used to be an actor, a theater actor."
Harry: "By the way, where's your husband, I mean, sir?"
Danny's father: "Hon! Danny! Hello... so Danny, surprised?"
Danny: "Kind of"
Dougie: "Oh..."
Leah: "Hey, you're kinda weird today recently. What's up?"
Dougie: "You don't need to know..."
Leah: "C'mon!"
Dougie: (sighs) "Swear, if you knew it, things will go harder."
Leah: "Oh my God, are you sure you're Dougie? I mean, you're so strange this time."
Harry: "Hey guys, I just leave you here. Don't touch anything please."
Leah: "Ok" (back to Dougie) "Hey, you, are you alright?"
Dougie: "No... I mean, yeah..."
Leah: "Are you sure? You really act so strange..."
Dougie: "You really want to know why?"
Leah: "Yeah"
Dougie: "Promise me that you didn't get mad to me..."
Leah: "Ok, ok... Just tell me"
Dougie: "I..."
Harry: "Guys, come with us, these guys are practicing something so cool! C'mon!"
Leah: "Ok... hey Doug, tell me later, ok?"
Dougie: "Ok" (whisper) "I wish you will understand..."
Leah: "Doug, you're saying something?"
Dougie: "No, nothing, I just... nevermind, let's go"

They watched some theater actors and actresses practicing a play.

Danny: "It's fantastic... amazing... if only Leah's here, she will also be amazed by the play..."
Harry: "Um... sir... speaking of Leah..."
Danny: "Wait, you know her?"
Harry: "Oh, Leah? Oh, yes, I mean... a little."
Danny: "How? Classmate? Friend? She never talk about a guy named Harry Judd."
Harry: "Oh, we just met this week. It's really a weird story. A very crazy story. She told me I'm the only person who can see her and Dougie. And she even told me to tell you that she is..."
Danny: "What? Who's Dougie?"
Harry: "Oh my... (to his self) what did I say?"
Leah: "Oh, there they are"

Leah love to sit beside Danny until she heard...

Danny: "Harry, Leah told you what about her? And who's that Dougie?"
Harry: "Leah... she is... she is already..."
Leah: "Harry! Don't!"

Dougie suddenly shout and cry. He's shaking and he really looks like scared, pale. Oh, yeah, only Leah and Harry heard him.

Leah: "Dougie! Dougie! Hey, are you alright? What's happening to you? Oh my God!"
Dougie: "It's here... it's here..."
Leah: "What's here?"
Harry: "Um, sir, wait, I just need to take care of something..."

Harry brings Leah and Dougie on a place inside the theater where no one else can see them... or not.

Harry: "Hey, what's happening?"
Leah: "Dougie, he suddenly freaked out!"
Dougie: "You don't understand!"
Leah: "And how are we going to understand what's happening to you! You didn't tell anything..."
Dougie: "This place..."
Harry: "This place's what?!"
Dougie: "This place... is..."
Leah: "C'mon Doug!"
Dougie: "I died here"

Silence.

Leah: "You must be joking... how...?"
Dougie: "Danny's father, he is the killer... he killed us! He killed us! He destroyed our life!"
Leah: "You're lying..."
Dougie: "Of course you will not believe but did really know who's Danny's father?!"
Leah: "I don't..."
Dougie: "LOOK! You don't know him well! Maybe Danny didn't also know that his father is a killer!"
Leah: "Dougie..."
Dougie: "And he didn't even try to..."
Leah: "Dougie, can you please shut up?!"
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  McFly(nick) on Fri Dec 12, 2008 6:13 pm

aw... leah said to dougie to shut up... whats that about??? hahahaa

tragic... GREAT FIC BTW! Razz Razz Razz
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Post  nicoleaika on Fri Dec 12, 2008 7:48 pm

McFly(nick) wrote:aw... leah said to dougie to shut up... whats that about??? hahahaa

tragic... GREAT FIC BTW! Razz Razz Razz

coz dougie's panic-ing... or parang he just continuing to say something.. and Dougie will say that Danny didn't even try to look for Leah affraid
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Post  McFly(nick) on Fri Dec 12, 2008 8:07 pm

nicoleaika wrote:
McFly(nick) wrote:aw... leah said to dougie to shut up... whats that about??? hahahaa

tragic... GREAT FIC BTW! Razz Razz Razz

coz dougie's panic-ing... or parang he just continuing to say something.. and Dougie will say that Danny didn't even try to look for Leah affraid

hhahahaha... ok get it... danny's father is the killer?? whoa!!!!

hahaha... excited for the next chapter.. wooooh Razz Razz Razz
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Post  kaisthelimit on Fri Dec 12, 2008 8:45 pm

OMD!!!
wooh!
next chap!!
the suspense is killing me!!! lol
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 9:15 am

Oh my gosh. Thank God I took the time to read your fic. It's great! haha. Dougie's so cute and poor Leah. haha.
I loove it! Very Happy Very Happy
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  jaschier on Sat Dec 13, 2008 2:19 pm

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more chapter again... wow!! i have to read lalo na kay anika, cause im late.. wait read ko lang sayo... Razz
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Post  McFly(nick) on Sat Dec 13, 2008 3:25 pm

next chap! excited.. hahaha XD Razz
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 8:46 pm

Chapter 5: It’s not just about Leah

Leah: "I... Look, I'm sorry... It was just..."
Dougie: "What? Oh... I forgot, Danny's your boyfriend. You loved him. You thought that he would make you the happiest girl in the world..."
Leah: "Dougie..."
Harry: "I don't get it... How do you know it was Danny's father? How do you know he’s the one who killed you?"
Dougie: "When I saw him, there is something inside me that tells me that that guy ended our lives. I felt we already met before."
Harry: "I still didn't get it how..."
Dougie: "I don’t get it too.”
Leah: "Ok, I'm confused! Are you serious or not?"
Dougie: "I am serious!”
Harry: "Maybe madam knows something about it."
Dougie: “And that’s the reason why she looked for a bodyguard?”
Harry: “Maybe…” (paused for a while) “Wait, let’s just forget about it, ok?” (Dougie stared to Harry like he wanted to kill him) “Oh, I mean, I have some other business to make, remember, I’m a body guard. I need to go now to someone I will, err, guard. BYE!”

Harry went back to Danny.

Danny: “Harry, you forgot something.”
Harry: “Oh, yeah, I forgot to---I forgot what?”
Danny: “About Leah. What happened to her? Is she okay? And who’s that Dougie?”
Harry: “Dougie is Leah’s… umm… sorry, I don’t know what’s the most appropriate term to describe his relationship with Leah.”
Danny: “Relationship with Leah?!”
Harry: “Oh, no, it’s not what you think. They’re like siblings or best friends. Leah loves you very much, no worries.”
Danny: “and?”
Harry: “Leah… she is…”

Harry suddenly went out of theater when he heard a gun shot.

Harry: “Oh no, what happened?”

Harry was so surprised when Danny’s father suddenly punched him

Danny’s father: (crying) “I don’t know why you become her body guard! Look at what you did! Because of your carelessness and giddiness…”
Danny: “Dad, what happened… no way! MUM!!”

Harry’s so surprised, Danny’s mother was shot and he thought it’s because of him. He’s her bodyguard, he’s suppose to guard her..

Danny: (crying) “Somebody, please call an ambulance. Mum! Wake up…”
Leah: “Harry, what happen… oh my God”
Harry: “I didn’t do anything… I’m so irresponsible. I didn’t do my job…”
Danny: “Harry…”
Harry: “Ok, kill me too… just like what your father did to Dougie!”
Danny’s father: (looks like he want to give Harry another punch) “What did you say..?”
Danny: “Dad! Wait…”
Danny’s father: “What? Do you believe him? I didn’t even know who’s that Dougie!”
Danny: “Dad, wait…” (sighed) “Harry, what do you mean?”
Harry: “Your father. He killed Dougie” (whisper to Leah) “Do you know Dougie’s surname?”
Dougie: “It’s Poynter.”
Harry: “He killed a guy named Dougie Poynter and his mum.”
Danny’s father: “Poynter?”
Danny: “Dad, don’t tell me… you did…?”

Danny’s father can’t talk… and went back to his husband and hugged her while Harry went back to the Theater. Leah followed her.

Leah: “Harry, it’s ok”
Harry: “It’s not ok, I’m going to lose this job.”
Leah: “Harry, be optimist. Everything will be fine.”
Harry: (crying) “It’s all my fault…”
Leah: “No, it’s not your fault… Actually I felt guilty, coz if you didn’t know me, you’ll able to guard your boss…”
Harry: “Don’t blame yourself. I’m the bodyguard. Whether I knew you or not, I must be responsible”
Leah: “Look, I don’t blame myself, it’s a compliment. But it looks like you’re still in not-that-good mood. I will just go out…”
Harry: “Leah… thanks”
Leah: “For what? For the compliment?”
Harry: “Yeah…” (smiles) “I think”
Leah: “Huh?”
Harry: “Nothing, really, nothing”

Harry and Leah smile to each other. While on Danny’s~~~

Danny’s father: “Poynter. I knew someone… she is one of the most amazing girl in the world. She’s nice. She also loves theater. Then, she’s unexpectedly disappeared… I looked for her, but I can’t find her, that’s the time I realize I need to move on... And then I meet your mom. We’re married. You’re born. And the next thing is… the girl I’m dying to be with shows up, with another guy and a little boy. I’m so mad. I’m so jealous. I want to kill them all. Then I got this chance, she and her son watch a play where I am one of the actors. And my role there is a killer...”
Danny: “Then you killed them?!”
Danny’s father: “I can’t control myself. Anger plus Jealousy makes me crazy…”

Dougie’s still standing, staring to Danny and his father, and waiting for something else that’ll happen. Danny suddenly remembered something…

Danny: “Wait, Leah can’t see dead people…(thinks deeply) no way…” (ran into the theater) “HARRY!!”

He saw Harry, laughing on a corner, with no one (no, I mean, with Leah)

Harry: “Oh, you’re calling me?”

Danny looks suspiciously to Harry.

Danny: “What, you’re laughing alone?”
Harry: “Oh, no, no, I’m not crazy…”
Danny: “Can I ask you a question about Leah?”
Harry: (glance to Leah and back to Danny) “Oh, sure, what is it?”
Danny: “Is Leah… (tears starting to drop from his eyes) “Is Leah’s already dead?”
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Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 9:09 pm

WAAAH! Heavy drama. LOL. Razz
I loove it! The twists are cool. Poor Danny!! mouth taped
Keep posting. I'll always check this out. Dance
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 9:17 pm

anika wrote:WAAAH! Heavy drama. LOL. Razz
I loove it! The twists are cool. Poor Danny!! mouth taped
Keep posting. I'll always check this out. Dance

Thanks a lot!!! Dance
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Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 9:32 pm

nicoleaika wrote:
anika wrote:WAAAH! Heavy drama. LOL. Razz
I loove it! The twists are cool. Poor Danny!! mouth taped
Keep posting. I'll always check this out. Dance

Thanks a lot!!! Dance
Sure sure! haha. It needs to be recognized because it's wicked. cheers
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:09 pm

anika wrote:
nicoleaika wrote:
anika wrote:WAAAH! Heavy drama. LOL. Razz
I loove it! The twists are cool. Poor Danny!! mouth taped
Keep posting. I'll always check this out. Dance

Thanks a lot!!! Dance
Sure sure! haha. It needs to be recognized because it's wicked. cheers

OMG, thank you thank you thank you!!!

I also read your fic, it's great!! when I read the first chap, i remembered one of my fics.. it's kinda the same (the first chap, I should say, lol)... thanks again
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  Kerstien on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:16 pm

poor Danny dear..
he's gonna be fine, I hope
Great fic, continue owkie! Very Happy
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:18 pm

Kerstien wrote:poor Danny dear..
he's gonna be fine, I hope
Great fic, continue owkie! Very Happy

ok Smile
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Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:21 pm

Haha. Really? Thanks for dropping by my fic too. Very Happy
It's good, really. Dougie as an angel of some sort is coool.He's so cute in the fic. Very makulit. It's just like him.wahaha. Very Happy
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:23 pm

anika wrote:Haha. Really? Thanks for dropping by my fic too. Very Happy
It's good, really. Dougie as an angel of some sort is coool.He's so cute in the fic. Very makulit. It's just like him.wahaha. Very Happy
and speaking of cute, I love your sig, lol
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Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:27 pm

nicoleaika wrote:
anika wrote:Haha. Really? Thanks for dropping by my fic too. Very Happy
It's good, really. Dougie as an angel of some sort is coool.He's so cute in the fic. Very makulit. It's just like him.wahaha. Very Happy
and speaking of cute, I love your sig, lol

hahaha. Thanks! I loove the pic. They look adorable here. They're so close!! I love you I love you The pic melts my heart.
My friend kept on remarking on how they looked good together as a couple. I was like "NO!! Danny should be straight."
hahaha. Danny does not equal gay. Razz
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:30 pm

^lol... i agree with you... btw, do you have a mcslash fic??
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  anika on Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:43 pm

nicoleaika wrote:^lol... i agree with you... btw, do you have a mcslash fic??

Um... I feel like a dope for asking this, but I've never heard of 'mcslash'. hahaha. Sorry. Embarassed I'm pretty embarassed to ask, but what's a 'mcslash'?
Sorry. hahaha. Embarassed
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