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Post  anika on Sat Feb 28, 2009 9:24 am

OMD!! A bullet!
I was imagining a scene like in the movie Matrix! LOL.
Cool! There's action! PBJT! PBJT! PBJT!
Update! clap
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Post  kaisthelimit on Sat Feb 28, 2009 2:53 pm

What? They're not going out? What's it called? lol
I can't help feel a little scared for Shea, Bree might disappear.
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:45 pm

KAI wrote:What? They're not going out? What's it called? lol
I can't help feel a little scared for Shea, Bree might disappear.

lol..hahaha..i don't even know what's bree thinking,,,,baka MU lang na sweet...daig pa ang mag asawa...hahaha...

yeah..bree's kind of weird or something..her mood always change...
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Sat Feb 28, 2009 4:51 pm

anika wrote:OMD!! A bullet!
I was imagining a scene like in the movie Matrix! LOL.
Cool! There's action! PBJT! PBJT! PBJT!
Update! clap

action...hahahaha..tnx for reading....!!!!!i like matrix...cool
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Feb 28, 2009 5:15 pm

just for fun?!? Weird girl... XD

this fic's exciting and thrilling!!! Whoa! Who is that girl? I mean, the girl na kinausap ni Bree.... hmm... Suspect

btw, Update!
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Post  PuDd_T on Sun Mar 01, 2009 9:47 pm

OMG! i love it!!!! it's so intriguing!! cheers cheers

cool king! king Approve!

i saw the picture that someone posted, the guy was real cute! yeah! he kind of looked liked Danny! clap

Bree's a mystery!

update! i la-la-love it! tongue <- this is my fave emoticon! just saw it today! lol
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Post  jaschier on Tue Mar 03, 2009 6:15 pm

yeah this is cool! but im so curious with the girl... parang my asasination na mangyayari... or my mga agent na gustong pumatay sa king... lol, king was the man!!! yeah update!!! love it!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Fri Mar 13, 2009 3:28 pm

anika wrote:OMD!! A bullet!
I was imagining a scene like in the movie Matrix! LOL.
Cool! There's action! PBJT! PBJT! PBJT!
Update! clap

tnx for reading...i feel horrible for not writing the next chapter..i was very busy with school stuff but summer's coming and i'll write again!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Fri Mar 13, 2009 3:30 pm

nicoleaika wrote:just for fun?!? Weird girl... XD

this fic's exciting and thrilling!!! Whoa! Who is that girl? I mean, the girl na kinausap ni Bree.... hmm... Suspect

btw, Update!

sorry for not writing...tnx for reading..i was very busy with school stuff but our finals just ended bounce
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Fri Mar 13, 2009 3:31 pm

PuDd_T wrote:OMG! i love it!!!! it's so intriguing!! cheers cheers

cool king! king Approve!

i saw the picture that someone posted, the guy was real cute! yeah! he kind of looked liked Danny! clap

Bree's a mystery!

update! i la-la-love it! tongue <- this is my fave emoticon! just saw it today! lol

tnx for loving my fic...lol...i'll have to write back soon if i'll finish these things in school...arrgghhh
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Fri Mar 13, 2009 3:32 pm

jaschier wrote:yeah this is cool! but im so curious with the girl... parang my asasination na mangyayari... or my mga agent na gustong pumatay sa king... lol, king was the man!!! yeah update!!! love it!

hahahaha...tnx for reading i'll update na talaga!
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Post  nikka! on Sun Mar 22, 2009 9:15 am

bree is... er, dangerous. lol!
well, she is endangering the life of the king after all .. kinda. i think.
it's all so confusing and mysterious.. i love it!

nice job! update soon.. Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

finally had time to comment.. i think i read the last chapter already last time.. but i was busy with school.. Sad
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Thu Mar 26, 2009 6:49 pm

nikka! wrote:bree is... er, dangerous. lol!
well, she is endangering the life of the king after all .. kinda. i think.
it's all so confusing and mysterious.. i love it!

nice job! update soon.. Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy

finally had time to comment.. i think i read the last chapter already last time.. but i was busy with school.. Sad

tnx for readong..i'll update today..i finally have the time...^_^!sorry guys if you were waiting too long!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:04 pm

"please...please...don't do it..." i heard bree cried from her sleep...she sweats a lot...
"bree...are you okay?" i tried to wake her up...i shook her body..and she open her eyes slowly..
"what happened?" she got up quickly...
"you were talking on your sleep...are you okay?" i told her..
"i'm fine...i have to go..." she stood up..
"what?why? where are you going?" i stood up followed her..
"none of your business..."
"c'mon bree! please..." i begged her
"will you stop it!" she shouted at me...
"you stop it!..." i yelled..." you tell me what's goin' on cause i can't take it anymore..."
"you don't have the right to yell at me!" she said
"yes i do...you came into my life mysteriously..you obviously ruined my life! i don't have a clue on what's goin' on!"
"look..i'm sorry...that's why i'm leaving ok!" someone knocked on the door
"sir..are you ok in there?" james said..
"everything's fine!" i yelled back...
"have to go..i'm sorry..." bree got her things and jumped through the window but i held her hand...
"please...at least tell me.." i begged again..
"i can't...not now..." she whispered then left..james entered the room..
"your majesty..what are you doing in there?"he asked
"bring my breakfast in here.." i told him lifelessly..
"c...certainly...sir.." clueless james answered

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i took my breakfast silently....after bree left...the day was gone smoothly...i was back to myself again...go to pubs hang with girls and james look relieved...i never expected that she would go back to my room from my window again...days passed and i started to work..james chattering about my wedding ans stuff...
"sir..since br---" i looked up at him..." i mean..since that girl is gone...and you're back...let's see who you're into this time...?" he gave me a bunch of pictures...i sighed...
one night i dreamt of running for my life...with bree...sweating a lot... i woke up with suspense...it came up to me that i still like to see her again....i knocked on james door and see james yawning opens the door and ask me why...
"hire me an inspector..." i shook james and he nodded..."tell him to find more about her..."then james eyes widened...he objected but followed me in the end....

To be continued..
sorry if i just updated today...
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Post  anika on Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:20 pm

WOW!!! So glad you updated! cheers cheers
aw... Bree left? The song ' she left me' is currently playing in my head. lol!
YEY!! He's gonna find her? COOLIO! Joy!
Go go go! clap
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:25 pm

anika wrote:WOW!!! So glad you updated! cheers cheers
aw... Bree left? The song ' she left me' is currently playing in my head. lol!
YEY!! He's gonna find her? COOLIO! Joy!
Go go go! clap

so sorry if it was too short cause i was doing something so i'll update tomorrow...
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Post  anika on Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:26 pm

ButterflyBibish wrote:
anika wrote:WOW!!! So glad you updated! cheers cheers
aw... Bree left? The song ' she left me' is currently playing in my head. lol!
YEY!! He's gonna find her? COOLIO! Joy!
Go go go! clap

so sorry if it was too short cause i was doing something so i'll update tomorrow...

No worries. I Loved it!! Razz Razz
Sure, sure. I'll be sure to read it tomorrow! cheers
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Post  kaisthelimit on Thu Mar 26, 2009 7:51 pm

Ei you're back!! I've missed you!!
I'm right, Bree had really disappeared. Tsk tsk tsk No
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Post  nikka! on Thu Mar 26, 2009 8:20 pm

bree left?? whaa? ha? AWWW.
he will hire an inspector!! wow... yey!

this is great! love it! cheers
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Fri Mar 27, 2009 7:14 pm

i sat up and tried to listen on what the inspector had to say...
"uhmm...your majesty..it's an honor..." he cleared his throat..."to work for you..i've done everything to please you...and if you do need anything.."
"straight to the point please..." james interrupted..
"oh right...right away sir..." he fixed his spectacles and cleared his throat again..."this brayden girl sir..i've found something.."
"of course you did..." james said...
"well...her real name is...brayden crizenne shaw...(had to use this shaw name..i don't have any other names to come up with...lol...)" he stopped and moved the chair and continued.."i've known that this girl has something hidden in her life..i just can't look it up...but she left their house two years ago...and haven't been heard from then..." he looked up at me and i nodded
"thank you....do you know where to find her?"
"oh..well..about that..she has this hang out something..i hear it's a dangerous place..." james eyes widened...looks like he knew i'm goin to go there..
"thank you very much...."
"it's my pleasure sir and sir..." james grabbed his hands..and tried to walk him off the palace...

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"sir..you're not doing it are you...?" james gave me a worried look
"oh please...of course i wouldn't..." james gave out a sigh of relief..." i wouldn't do anything that doesn't involve brady..."
"what?" james yelled.."what if you'll get hurt!" he said quickly...
"james...i'll be fine..." i touched his shoulders..." yuck...we look like a couple!" i gave him a disgusted look...
"anyway sir...good luck..." he said..
"thank you..." i was very determined to do it...i'll see her again....soon...

to be continued..
leave comments...sorry if it's short...
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Post  nikka! on Fri Mar 27, 2009 8:33 pm

oooh...
they're gonna meet again!!
Dance Dance Dance Dance Dance

it's okay if it's short... it was great!
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Post  nicoleaika on Fri Mar 27, 2009 11:49 pm

baka may gusto si James kay shea... jokes!

XD YEY! AT LAST! You updated... hehe... wow... looks like shea finally found the girl na hindi nia makakalimutan at hindi ipagpapalit sa ibang girls... nice update... Approve!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Sat Mar 28, 2009 10:39 am

kai(: wrote:Ei you're back!! I've missed you!!
I'm right, Bree had really disappeared. Tsk tsk tsk No

tnx for reading! PBJT!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Sat Mar 28, 2009 10:40 am

nikka! wrote:bree left?? whaa? ha? AWWW.
he will hire an inspector!! wow... yey!

this is great! love it! cheers

tnx for reading! bounce Joy!
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Post  ButterflyBibish on Sat Mar 28, 2009 10:41 am

nikka! wrote:oooh...
they're gonna meet again!!
Dance Dance Dance Dance Dance

it's okay if it's short... it was great!
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awwww..tnx...i'll update a long one if ever i'll have the time! i promise you guys! Group hug
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