19 (One-shot)
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19 (One-shot)
kaisthelimit Sun Jan 11, 2009 5:57 pm
Actually this wasn't made by me. But I really liked this piece of fic. It's really sad. When I first read it, It made me depressed. And it's kinda hard to understand but its really good, deep.
DOUGIE'S POV.
Credits to Litey♥ from Dougiefied
DOUGIE'S POV.
19.
I sat in her empty hospital room, near the little wooden desk,
Opening that mystery black notebook,
The one she did everything possible to keep me away from.
"
46.
healthy.
We sat on the grass outside,
I was nuzzled deeply in your chest,
Your heartbeats calmed me,
My life was perfect.
45.5
healthy.
Today, we laid on my bed for almost 4 hours.
You made small little traces of circles with your soft finger tips
On the protrusion of my hip bone.
You said I was beautiful.
48
healthy.
Today was picnic day.
My face was dirty from the chocolate cake Danny made.
It was surprisingly good.
You laughed at me for having a small chocolate spot on the tip of my nose and then kissed it away.
"Hungry, are we?"
53
healthy.
Today we had pizza,
Just like yesterday, and the day before, and before that.
Tom and I were having an olive fight and I tripped on you.
You laughed and said "You're crushing me."
53
Sick.
Today I sent you to go buy a new mirror.
Ours is broken.
You said it wasn't the mirror, it was me.
I wasn't laughing.
51
Sick.
Today, we laid on my bed for almost 4 hours.
You put your hand on my stomach.
You didn't even see my hip bones.
47
Sick.
Yesterday I went to Lindsay.
She said she knows a doctor.
He gave me pills.
42
Sick.
Today I wore your favorite dress.
You said I looked the same, beautiful as always.
I don't want to look the same.
39.5
Sick.
Today you asked me if I'm sick.
I asked you why, so you took me to the mirror and said I'm pale.
I wasn't looking at my face.
38
Sick.
Today Tom patted my back and let out a gasp.
I pretended not to hear and went to my room, to swallow another blue pill.
Red in the morning, green in the afternoon, blue in the evening.
35
Sick.
Today, you, me and Harry watched a DVD.
Harry looked at me awkwardly.
You still didn't notice.
The pills aren’t working.
I took 4 blues.
32
Sick.
Today you took me to the doctor to see why I'm throwing up.
The doctor said I'm just weak and need to rest.
You made me tea.
You.. Idiot.
29.5
Sick.
Danny knows.
I took 5 reds.
26.5
Sick.
Today, you wore an orange shirt.
Harry claimed it's black.
He's lying, it's orange.
Harry's lying. He's lying.
6 greens. 6 reds.
22
Sick.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Black.
19
Sick.
Today the doctor will tell you the news. I can feel it.
I love you,
all 19 kilograms of me.
I'm not sick. "
I sat in her empty hospital room, near the little wooden desk,
Opening that mystery black notebook,
The one she did everything possible to keep me away from.
"
46.
healthy.
We sat on the grass outside,
I was nuzzled deeply in your chest,
Your heartbeats calmed me,
My life was perfect.
45.5
healthy.
Today, we laid on my bed for almost 4 hours.
You made small little traces of circles with your soft finger tips
On the protrusion of my hip bone.
You said I was beautiful.
48
healthy.
Today was picnic day.
My face was dirty from the chocolate cake Danny made.
It was surprisingly good.
You laughed at me for having a small chocolate spot on the tip of my nose and then kissed it away.
"Hungry, are we?"
53
healthy.
Today we had pizza,
Just like yesterday, and the day before, and before that.
Tom and I were having an olive fight and I tripped on you.
You laughed and said "You're crushing me."
53
Sick.
Today I sent you to go buy a new mirror.
Ours is broken.
You said it wasn't the mirror, it was me.
I wasn't laughing.
51
Sick.
Today, we laid on my bed for almost 4 hours.
You put your hand on my stomach.
You didn't even see my hip bones.
47
Sick.
Yesterday I went to Lindsay.
She said she knows a doctor.
He gave me pills.
42
Sick.
Today I wore your favorite dress.
You said I looked the same, beautiful as always.
I don't want to look the same.
39.5
Sick.
Today you asked me if I'm sick.
I asked you why, so you took me to the mirror and said I'm pale.
I wasn't looking at my face.
38
Sick.
Today Tom patted my back and let out a gasp.
I pretended not to hear and went to my room, to swallow another blue pill.
Red in the morning, green in the afternoon, blue in the evening.
35
Sick.
Today, you, me and Harry watched a DVD.
Harry looked at me awkwardly.
You still didn't notice.
The pills aren’t working.
I took 4 blues.
32
Sick.
Today you took me to the doctor to see why I'm throwing up.
The doctor said I'm just weak and need to rest.
You made me tea.
You.. Idiot.
29.5
Sick.
Danny knows.
I took 5 reds.
26.5
Sick.
Today, you wore an orange shirt.
Harry claimed it's black.
He's lying, it's orange.
Harry's lying. He's lying.
6 greens. 6 reds.
22
Sick.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Red.
Green.
Blue.
Black.
19
Sick.
Today the doctor will tell you the news. I can feel it.
I love you,
all 19 kilograms of me.
I'm not sick. "
Credits to Litey♥ from Dougiefied
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
ButterflyBibish Sun Jan 11, 2009 6:05 pm
kawawa naman si dougie...(pretending i understand it...sshh...) lolz...pero infairness na feel ko ang grief ng girl...nyc fic...sad nga lang..sa cheesy nalang ako....ayoko ng sad..tatatak yan sa heart ko..tulad ng titanic..magiging obssessive freak na naman ako sa sad movies/stories...sad movies always makes you cry..LOL... 
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
kaisthelimit Sun Jan 11, 2009 6:34 pm
ButterflyBibish wrote:kawawa naman si dougie...(pretending i understand it...sshh...) lolz...pero infairness na feel ko ang grief ng girl...nyc fic...sad nga lang..sa cheesy nalang ako....ayoko ng sad..tatatak yan sa heart ko..tulad ng titanic..magiging obssessive freak na naman ako sa sad movies/stories...sad movies always makes you cry..LOL...
Hahahaha. It hard to understand noh? Super deep kasi. Haha. LOL yeah, pag sad tumatatak sa heart
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ButterflyBibish Sun Jan 11, 2009 6:50 pm
KAI wrote:ButterflyBibish wrote:kawawa naman si dougie...(pretending i understand it...sshh...) lolz...pero infairness na feel ko ang grief ng girl...nyc fic...sad nga lang..sa cheesy nalang ako....ayoko ng sad..tatatak yan sa heart ko..tulad ng titanic..magiging obssessive freak na naman ako sa sad movies/stories...sad movies always makes you cry..LOL...
Hahahaha. It hard to understand noh? Super deep kasi. Haha. LOL yeah, pag sad tumatatak sa heart
LOL...hehehe...kaya nga....cheesy nalang...hahaha....ayoko nga ng sad..
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meah XD Sun Jan 11, 2009 9:40 pm
What are the numbers for?
Sorry. I understood the fic but I don't get what the numbers are for or what they are representing.
Sorry. I understood the fic but I don't get what the numbers are for or what they are representing.
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
jaschier Mon Jan 12, 2009 2:00 pm
wow its a unique piece, i like it.... yeah what about the numbers? whats for? 
its kinda emotional...
its kinda emotional...
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
jaschier Mon Jan 12, 2009 2:01 pm
ButterflyBibish wrote:kawawa naman si dougie...(pretending i understand it...sshh...) lolz...pero infairness na feel ko ang grief ng girl...nyc fic...sad nga lang..sa cheesy nalang ako....ayoko ng sad..tatatak yan sa heart ko..tulad ng titanic..magiging obssessive freak na naman ako sa sad movies/stories...sad movies always makes you cry..LOL...
i remember my sister when she watch the titanic last night, she was crying talaga, cause he thinks that jack was tom...
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
carmzy_sweetness Mon Jan 12, 2009 8:55 pm
I kind of get it. What she means and everything and that really made me think.
I'm curious about the sickness though.
Darnit...now I'm more depressed.
I'm curious about the sickness though.
Darnit...now I'm more depressed.
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
kaisthelimit Mon Jan 12, 2009 9:28 pm
Awh. Sorry guys for making you all confused and depressed!
The numbers means her kilograms. Like, in the end, she only weighs 19 kilograms.
Me too, I'm curious about the sickness to. Maybe it was anorexia? Cause she's like so thin in the end? But why does she have to drink those colored pills? Okay I'm confused too. Haha.
The numbers means her kilograms. Like, in the end, she only weighs 19 kilograms.
I kind of get it. What she means and everything and that really made me think.
I'm curious about the sickness though. Super Tounge
Darnit...now I'm more depressed.
Me too, I'm curious about the sickness to. Maybe it was anorexia? Cause she's like so thin in the end? But why does she have to drink those colored pills? Okay I'm confused too. Haha.
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jaschier Tue Jan 13, 2009 1:42 pm
it makes me think that she is pregnant... lol malayo na... but the pills... well napaka shake's spear ang gumawa nyan...
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carmzy_sweetness Tue Jan 13, 2009 5:46 pm
KAI wrote:Me too, I'm curious about the sickness to. Maybe it was anorexia? Cause she's like so thin in the end? But why does she have to drink those colored pills? Okay I'm confused too. Haha.
Lmao. That's what I don't get. I was actually thinking something in the lines of cancer or eating disorders. haha. I guess we'll never know.
If you read between the lines it actually has a lot of message...or to me it does, at least.
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kaisthelimit Tue Jan 13, 2009 8:45 pm
jaschier wrote:it makes me think that she is pregnant... lol malayo na... but the pills... well napaka shake's spear ang gumawa nyan...
Haha. Can be
Yeah, you're right, napaka Shakespeare nga nung gumawa nung story
Lmao. That's what I don't get. I was actually thinking something in the lines of cancer or eating disorders. haha. I guess we'll never know.
If you read between the lines it actually has a lot of message...or to me it does, at least. mouth taped
Yeah, maybe.
Guess I'll never know... Was I invading....
Sorry, Mcgeek moment. Haha.
Yeah, I've noticed that too.
That's why it's really hard to understand.
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carmzy_sweetness Wed Jan 14, 2009 5:37 pm
KAI wrote:Yeah, maybe.
Guess I'll never know... Was I invading....
Sorry, Mcgeek moment. Haha.
Yeah, I've noticed that too.
That's why it's really hard to understand.
Ressisting the urge to continue........WAS I TOO CLOSE FOR COMFORT!?!
Darn.
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kaisthelimit Wed Jan 14, 2009 8:44 pm
carmzy_sweetness wrote:KAI wrote:Yeah, maybe.
Guess I'll never know... Was I invading....
Sorry, Mcgeek moment. Haha.
Yeah, I've noticed that too.
That's why it's really hard to understand.
Ressisting the urge to continue........WAS I TOO CLOSE FOR COMFORT!?!
Darn.
CAN'T. HELP. IT.
In driving you homeee...
Raaaawr.
Haha.
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carmzy_sweetness Thu Jan 15, 2009 6:05 pm
KAI wrote:CAN'T. HELP. IT.
In driving you homeee...
Raaaawr.
Haha.
Lmao. Kapwa-dork.
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maia 8D Fri Jan 16, 2009 9:21 pm
O_O
That's soo sad. Gosh. nakakdepress. I know you can't see me, but i'm frowning right now.
T'was focused more on the girl's problem. Not much mcfly in it. I mean, you could take away the mcfly and it would still be great. Cept they made it a whole lot better. Haha. And the way she wrote it. With the suspense building and the creative style and all. It's just. Excellent.
It's killing me not knowing what she was sick of. Why was she getting thinner? Was she anorexic? Vommiting? Uhm. pregnant? Haha. Then the orange shirt which harry claims is black... color blind? And the pills? That's confusing. But gosh. It makes me wanna break down. O_O
Good job, writer. Good job.
That's soo sad. Gosh. nakakdepress. I know you can't see me, but i'm frowning right now.
T'was focused more on the girl's problem. Not much mcfly in it. I mean, you could take away the mcfly and it would still be great. Cept they made it a whole lot better. Haha. And the way she wrote it. With the suspense building and the creative style and all. It's just. Excellent.
It's killing me not knowing what she was sick of. Why was she getting thinner? Was she anorexic? Vommiting? Uhm. pregnant? Haha. Then the orange shirt which harry claims is black... color blind? And the pills? That's confusing. But gosh. It makes me wanna break down. O_O
Good job, writer. Good job.
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
kaisthelimit Wed Jan 21, 2009 5:30 pm
Oh my gosh. Sad. Sad. Sad. But very good. Sad
I know
Lmao. Kapwa-dork. Group hug
Hahahaha
O_O
That's soo sad. Gosh. nakakdepress. I know you can't see me, but i'm frowning right now.
T'was focused more on the girl's problem. Not much mcfly in it. I mean, you could take away the mcfly and it would still be great. Cept they made it a whole lot better. Haha. And the way she wrote it. With the suspense building and the creative style and all. It's just. Excellent.
It's killing me not knowing what she was sick of. Why was she getting thinner? Was she anorexic? Vommiting? Uhm. pregnant? Haha. Then the orange shirt which harry claims is black... color blind? And the pills? That's confusing. But gosh. It makes me wanna break down. O_O
Good job, writer. Good job.
I know, right? When I fisrt read it, I felt very depressed to. Nakakatama talaga. Yeah, t'was better coz she put Mcfly in it. Haha.
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
jaschier Tue Feb 03, 2009 6:03 pm
naalala ko itong fic na ito nung nagpapalit ako sa bahay... and i found out, na baka, she used to take drugs... lol... its just my hypothesis...
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Re: 19 (One-shot)
kaisthelimit Sat Feb 07, 2009 2:18 pm
jaschier wrote:naalala ko itong fic na ito nung nagpapalit ako sa bahay... and i found out, na baka, she used to take drugs... lol... its just my hypothesis...
Haha, yeah maybe.
When will we really know what is wrong with her?
Guess we'll never know, yeaaah
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