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Post  nicoleaika on Wed Dec 24, 2008 6:37 pm

Chapter 9: Dougie’s Appointment

While walking away from Danny’s home…

Harry: “So, where are we going to start?”
Tom: “Who are you asking?”
Harry: “Of course, the three of you”
Dougie: “Maybe we could start at the place where Leah died.”
Harry: “Where we find her last time?”
Dougie: “Yup.”
Harry: “Ok, let’s go there.”

They continue walking…

Harry: “By the way, Dougie, I’m curious, what’s your appointment?”

No one answered. Harry look behind. Tom’s the only one who’s walking with him.

Harry: “Whoa, where’s Dougie and Leah?”
Tom: “You’re asking me?”
Harry: “Of course”
Tom: “You’re the only one who can see them.”
Harry: “Geez… (scratched his head) where are they?!”

*While Harry and Tom continuously walking, Dougie stopped by on an Academy-like place, so is Leah.

Leah: “Hey, what’s up inside?”
Dougie: “Oh, what? Inside? My appointment”
Leah: “Really? You mean, your appointment is real?”
Dougie: “I think. It just popped up on my appointment board when I passed by here last time.”
Leah: “Appointment board?! You have an appointment board??!? What??! (Pause) ok, never mind… (Stares to Dougie) you look serious, huh? Who’s there?”
Dougie: “What who?”
Leah: “Oh, it’s not who, so… what’s in there?”
Dougie: “No! I mean… It’s a who!”
Leah: (Smiles) “Really? Oh, who’s there?”
Dougie: “I don’t know. I don’t know her name. I just saw her when you and Harry talked last time.”
Leah: (nod) “Uhh… so your appointment is not the usual appointment?”
Dougie: “Yeah… I guess…”
Leah: (laughs) “Don’t tell me you didn’t know what’s the meaning of appointment?! ”
Dougie: “I know. I just don’t know what’s the usual type of appointment…”
Leah: “I can’t believe a guy like you spying a girl.”
Dougie: “Well, it’s funny, haha… OH! Wait! There she is!”
Leah: “Where?”
Dougie: “The one with five colours in her hair!”
Leah: “Five colours in her hair?”

Leah saw her… and it was Kelly.

Leah: “She’s your…”
Dougie: “Yes, she’s gorgeous, isn’t she?”
Leah: (her voice is like vibrating, like she want’s to cry but she can’t) “Of course. She is.”
Dougie: “Hey, are you alright?”
Leah: “Yeah, yeah… actually I’m very alright.”
Dougie: “Oh, really… do you know her?”
Leah: “Dougie, she’s Kelly, she’s my best friend.”
Dougie: “Really? Wow… what a coincidence”
Leah: “Maybe she knows something about my body”
Dougie: “Do you think?”
Leah: “Yeah”
Dougie: “But why she’s inside of this, I don’t know, a school, I think… instead of telling Danny about your dead, cold body?”
Leah: “I don’t know… maybe we should talk to her”
Dougie: “Yeah! Not maybe, we should really talk to her! (smiles… then saddens) “But how? We’re dead…”
Leah: (sighed) “Okay… Where’s Harry?”
Dougie: “I think they keep on walking. And it looks like they’re kind of far from us now.”
Leah: “C’mon, let’s go, let’s follow them.”
Dougie: “No! You can go alone…”
Leah: “Please Dougie, please…”
Dougie: “No, no, and NO! Bye Leah! See ya later!”
Leah: “Ok, fine, if you don’t want, then I will. Oh, by the way, before I go, don’t worry, I will not tell Kelly about you” (smiles) “Bye!”
Dougie: (follows Leah) “Hey, wait! I’m just joking! You didn’t let me finish first” (smiles)
Leah: “But what if Kelly go away?”
Dougie: “She will not. I think she lives there”
Leah: “What? But this is not the 5th street! How come?”
Dougie: “Maybe you should ask her about it, if Harry is able to talk to her…”
Leah: “Maybe…”

Leah and Dougie walk through and through until they saw Tom and Harry…

Tom: “Wait Harry, I will just buy juice”
Harry: “Go…”

And Harry saw Dougie and Leah

Harry: “There you are! Where the earth you guys came from?”
Leah: “Dougie’s appointment”
Harry: “Dougie’s appointment?!”
Leah: “Never mind how we called it. Or how we called her. We just need you to talk to her.”
Harry: “And why?”
Dougie: “Because ‘maybe’ she knows something where we can find Leah’s body”
Harry: “Oh… really… who is she?”
Leah: “My best friend, Kelly.”
Harry: “Uh… okay, fine, let’s go… Oh, where’s Tom?”

They look around and they saw Tom, sipping his juice unconsciously. In his mind: “I can’t believe Harry’s talking to Leah, or to Dougie…” Harry surprised Tom by shouting on his ears.

Tom: “OH MY GOD! THAT HURTS! Why you did it?”
Harry: “You’re unconscious.”
Tom: “I still can’t believe you’re talking to Leah and Dougie”
Harry: “I know, I know, I look like crazy”
Tom: “YEAH!”
Harry: “ANYWAY, let’s go, we will talk to someone who can maybe help us on finding Leah’s body”
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  kaisthelimit on Wed Dec 24, 2008 9:53 pm

this is soo cool!
dougie likes the girl with 5 colors in her hair!!
hahahhaa more more more!! Smile
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  Kerstien on Wed Dec 24, 2008 10:01 pm

what's Kelly doing there?
oohhh...updates!! Wink
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  anika on Fri Dec 26, 2008 9:55 am

hahaha. I laughed so hard when Kelly went out. Aw... Dougiee!! Cool update. Razz Razz
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 27, 2008 3:48 pm

Chapter 10: The girl with five colours in her hair

Harry: “Where did you find her?”
Dougie: “I don’t know what kind of place is that. It’s like an Academy or something. An orphanage I guess”
Harry: “Orphanage?”
Tom: “Orphanage? Did you say Orphanage? We passed an Orphanage while walking.”
Harry: “We did?”
Tom: “Yeah”
Leah: “Ow?”
Dougie: “It was really an orphanage?”
Leah: “There’s a lot of questions in my mind right now. Can we hurry?”
Harry: “No, we can’t!” (Smiles)
Leah: “I mean, can we hurry?! H-U-R-R-Y, hurry!”
Harry: “Oh, you mean, like, rush?”
Leah: “Yeah”
Harry: “Oh, okay… guys, let’s hurry, said Leah.”

They speed up their walk until they reached the Academy-like Orphanage, where Kelly currently lives.

Tom: “This place looks familiar”
Harry: “Eh? Really?”
Tom: “Yeah, really… Oh! This is really an orphanage! This is the place…”

Tom reminisces something, daydreams…

Tom: “I used to help orphans, I mean, a volunteer. Because I used to be one of them.”
Harry: “You’re not one of them anymore?”
Tom: “I met my real parents”
Harry: “Oh…”
Tom: “I remembered when I became close to Kelly.”

Dougie stares to Tom wrathfully.

Tom: “She also volunteered on helping orphans. And when we’re kind of, the best of friends, we promised to each other that if there’s something bad that can’t go out of our minds, we will live here so that we will able to forget it...”
Leah: “That’s why she lives here now?”
Harry: “Hmm… let’s go and talk to her now… umm… by the way, where is she?”
Dougie: “She’s that one! The girl with five colours in her hair”
Harry: “Five colours in her hair? Oh, (looking on the girl with five colours in her hair) she is Kelly?”
Tom: “Yeah… she’s Kelly. KELLY!”

Kelly turned around and surprised to see Tom.

Kelly: “Oh my God! (Cover her mouth using her hands---err)”
Tom: “Hello! It’s nice to see you again!”

And they hugged each other. Dougie’s red as a tomato, because of jealousy and anger.

Leah: “Hey, Doug, you alright?”
Dougie: “Am I look like alright?! Harry!! Can you please tell them to stop it?!”
Harry: “Oh, what? Tom and Kelly? Why? You’re jealous?”
Dougie: “Of course yes! Did I look like I’m not jealous?! (Pause) I mean… I do … yes”
Harry: (smiles) “Okay… Tom, can we talk to her now?”
Tom: “Oh, oh yeah…”

And they stopped hugging each other.

Harry: “Before I forgot, my name is Harry”
Kelly: “Oh, nice to meet you Harry, my name is Kelly” (and they shake hands)
Harry: “We’re here to ask you some questions.”
Kelly: (smiles) “Question about what?”
Tom: “About, about, Leah”
Kelly: “About Leah? (saddens) What’s about Leah?”
Harry: “Danny didn’t believe that Leah’s already dead. You’re the last person who…”
Leah: “We just want to ask you if you know something about my body”
Harry: “We just want to ask you if you know something about her body.”
Leah: “And why are you living here right now”
Harry: “And why are you living here right now”
Leah: “And if you already know that I’m already dead”
Harry: “And if you already know that she is already dead.”
Dougie: “And why are you gorgeous”
Harry: “And why are you gor…What?! It’s off topic!”
Dougie: “Dude, I can’t stop my feelings! I really, really like her.”

Kelly is speechless and unaware.

Tom: “Hey, Kelly (waving his hand), are you alright?”
Kelly: (sobbing) “Leah’s already d-d-d-d-dead?!”
Harry: “Sorry to say, but yeah”
Kelly: “But how?!”
Dougie: “Because of heart disease”
Harry: “Because of heart disease”
Kelly: “Heart Disease?! What a surprise! Leah’s a very active person. How she had that kind of disease?!”
Leah: “I don’t know too… I was also surprised.”
Harry: “She doesn’t know too. She was also surprised.”
Kelly: “Wait, (wiping her tears) how did you know she’s also surprised? Oh, before anything else, how did you know she’s already dead?”
Harry: “Because I can see her. And other people, including you, can’t.”
Kelly: “Oh, is she around?”
Harry: “Yeah”
Kelly: “Prove it. Tell me who’s my first crush.”
Leah: “It’s a guy called Michael.”
Harry: “A guy called Michael?”
Kelly: “Oh… it’s correct. Next, who’s Leah’s first ever boyfriend.”
Leah: “It’s definitely Danny”
Harry: “It’s definitely Danny?”
Kelly: “Okay, it’s correct again… Last, when is my birthday?”
Leah: (Thinks deeply and…) “Kelly… (smiles) June 27, 1988”
Harry: “June 27, 1988?”
Kelly: “Okay, you’re right. So… she’s really around. Um… what do you want?”
Tom: “Do you know something about her body? Her cold body? I mean, like, where we can find it…”
Kelly: “I don’t. I don’t even know that Leah’s already dead.”
Tom: “Um… what else? Umm… Oh yeah, why you’re living here right now?”
Kelly: “We have a promise, right?”
Tom: “Right… so what’s bad?”
Kelly: “Someone really scared me..."
Dougie: (inhales) “The unknown caller…” (exhales)
Harry: “Unknown caller?!”
Kelly: “Yeah, an unknown caller. He’s angrily asking me where can I find Mr. Jones
Tom: “Jones? Who, Danny?!”
Kelly: “I don’t know… But the caller’s looking for a guy who’s last name is Jones… And there’s only two Jones I know…”
Harry: “So it’s either Danny or his father?”
Dougie: “Okay… Leah, Harry, do you think that my death has something to do with it?”
Leah: “How?”
Dougie: “My father.”
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Re: She Falls Asleep

Post  PuDd_T on Sat Dec 27, 2008 7:11 pm

OMG! this fic is wonderful!

so many intrigues! why can't they find Leah's body??

Doesn't kelly know she left her in her car?? confused

anyway, i'll just look forwrd for the next chapters!

i like it! Joy!
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sat Dec 27, 2008 7:31 pm

PuDd_T wrote:OMG! this fic is wonderful!

so many intrigues! why can't they find Leah's body??

Doesn't kelly know she left her in her car?? confused

anyway, i'll just look forwrd for the next chapters!

i like it! Joy!

Oh, thanks for reading it

btw, i'm currently typing the next chapter

tnx again
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  kaisthelimit on Sat Dec 27, 2008 8:38 pm

Leah: “There’s a lot of questions in my mind right now. Can we hurry?”
Harry: “No, we can’t!” (Smiles)
Leah: “I mean, can we hurry?! H-U-R-R-Y, hurry!”
Harry: “Oh, you mean, like, rush?”
Leah: “Yeah”
Harry: “Oh, okay… guys, let’s hurry, said Leah.”

Hahaha

whoaaa. yes, this is so intriguing! more chaps eh? Rock On!
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  PuDd_T on Mon Dec 29, 2008 9:38 am

nicoleaika wrote:
PuDd_T wrote:OMG! this fic is wonderful!

so many intrigues! why can't they find Leah's body??

Doesn't kelly know she left her in her car?? confused

anyway, i'll just look forwrd for the next chapters!

i like it! Joy!

Oh, thanks for reading it

btw, i'm currently typing the next chapter

tnx again

you're very much welcome Razz

I like the way you write.. it's like a script! Very Happy

i like reading scripts! hahaha!!

I'll be looking forward to the next chapters! yey! pig
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Mon Dec 29, 2008 11:05 am

PuDd_T wrote:
nicoleaika wrote:
PuDd_T wrote:OMG! this fic is wonderful!

so many intrigues! why can't they find Leah's body??

Doesn't kelly know she left her in her car?? confused

anyway, i'll just look forwrd for the next chapters!

i like it! Joy!

Oh, thanks for reading it

btw, i'm currently typing the next chapter

tnx again

you're very much welcome Razz

I like the way you write.. it's like a script! Very Happy

i like reading scripts! hahaha!!

I'll be looking forward to the next chapters! yey! pig

yeah... coz it's easier... script method XD
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  anika on Mon Dec 29, 2008 11:46 am

OMD!!!!!!! This is so exciting! Kinda like in an action film you know? hahaha.
I love it when Dougie gets jealous! Aw... Poor Dougie. And Kelly and Tom know each other?? WICKED!
I can't wait for more!! cheers cheers cheers cheers cheers
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Tue Dec 30, 2008 12:10 am

Chapter 11: Add Kelly

Leah: “You’re father?”
Dougie: “Maybe he wants to revenge for what Danny’s father did to me and to mum…”
Harry: “Ahh… so he’s the one who’s looking for that Mr. Jones a.k.a. Danny’s father?”
Dougie: “I think so…”
Kelly: “Who’s the one looking for Danny’s father?”
Harry: “Dougie said maybe it was his father.”
Kelly: “Oh, gosh, who’s that Dougie?!”
Dougie: (flushed) “Okay, she doesn’t know who I am…”
Harry: “Oh, I forgot, sorry Doug. By the way, Kelly, Dougie’s also someone you can’t see but I can. He was like a younger brother of Leah.”
Kelly: “Oh, I see… on the other hand (breathes deeply)… why me? There’s lot of people he can call, but why me? I don’t even know him!”
Tom: “Maybe he can’t find the cell phone number of Danny, or mines, or even Danny’s father. And he found yours…”
Dougie: “Ooh! I know it! Maybe it’s a coincidence!”
Harry: “Coincidence?! (Pause) Ah… because you like Kelly? Yeah, right”
Tom: “Who likes Kelly?!”
Dougie: (blushes) “Okay, maybe I just stroll around this place…” (Leisurely walk away)
Leah: (Following Dougie) “Hey Doug! I’m so proud of you! You’re in love!”
Dougie: “Shut up Leah…”
Leah: “Wow! You’re grown up! You told me to shut up! Wait, shut up?! You…”
Dougie and Leah laugh

Their voices slowly fade out…

Harry: (Smiling at the direction where Dougie and Leah walked, whispering) “Leah’s really a very nice girl…”
Tom: “Hey, Harry, who likes Kelly?”
Harry: (Back to reality) “What? Eh? Kelly? You’re asking me who likes Kelly?”
Tom: (moving his head up and down) “Yeah…”
Harry: “Oh, why? You’re jealous, too?”
Tom: “TOO?! So you like Kelly?”
Harry: “NO! C’mon, I like Leah. Dougie likes Kelly. What, you like her?”
Tom: “Ahh… Dougie…No, I don’t like her, we’re just too close”
Harry: “Yeah.”
Kelly: (Jaw drops) “My God! Gosh! I’m confused, I didn’t know what to say! Maybe you can go home now because I have some things to do.” (Pushing Tom and Harry out)
Tom: (Mannerly) “It’s not the right way to make the visitors go home, Kels”
Kelly: “I know, but I really need peace just for a while.”
Harry: “But Leah and Dougie are still inside.”
Kelly: “It doesn’t matter, you’re the only one who can see them, right?”
Harry: “I… I don’t know. Yeah so far”
Kelly: “And thank you for the news about Leah.”
Harry: “But (stops Kelly from pushing him and Tom out) we really need to find Leah’s body.”
Kelly: “But I can’t help! I don’t know everything”
Harry: “No, maybe you can help us. Maybe Dougie’s right that the one who’s calling you bad is his father. Maybe his father knows where we can find Leah’s body.”
Kelly: “Oh, yeah, you’re right. Then you still didn’t need me. The caller is not my father.”
Harry: “But Dougie wants to.”
Tom: “MAY-be Harry’s right. Look, if you help us, maybe you’ll able to answer your question why his father called you instead of the others
Kelly: “But…”
Tom: (Shows a very sorry face) “Please Kelly”
Kelly: “Oh Tom! Don’t look at me like that! I really want to help but I still got so many things to do.”
Harry: “Kelly, for Leah.”
Tom: “Yeah, for Leah.”

Kelly thinks deeply. And smiles…

Kelly: “Okay… I will… (Harry and Tom will jump so high because of delight when Kelly suddenly adds…) but for 2 conditions”
Harry: “Hey! Some people always ask for only one condition”
Kelly: “But SOME people don’t.”
Tom: “By the way, Kelly, what are those conditions?”
Kelly: “First, you’ll help me first on what I’m going to do here in the orphanage.”
Harry: “WHAT?! No, no, I’m not good in handling kids… and adults. Because of me, Danny’s mother died.”
Kelly: “Danny’s mother died? Oh, condolence to Danny.”
Tom: “Um… what’s the second one?”
Kelly: “You’ll help me finding out why that Dougie’s father called me ‘stead of anyone else.”
Harry: “Ahh… okay, let’s go”
Kelly: “Whoa! You’re going to help me?”
Harry: “No, we will go now! Bye!”
Kelly: “Hey… Okay, fine, bye!”
Tom: “Wait, he was just joking”
Harry: “I thought you would stop me”
Tom laughs
Kelly: “Ha, ha… let’s go now.”
Harry: “Oh-Kay”

And they went inside the orphanage to do some things.
Wonder where are Leah and Dougie right now…

Leah: “Oh my God. Where are we now?”
Dougie: “I… I seriously… I seriously know!” (Smiles)
Leah: “Really? Where are we?”
Dougie: “Our… our… our home”
Leah: “Your home?!”

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hndi ko talaga alam ano title XD
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Post  anika on Tue Dec 30, 2008 1:38 pm

Oh my goosh!! What's gonna happen?? waah!! dead dead dead dead
hahaha. Gosh I enjoyed that. This is goood.
Dougie's cool! Aw.. He really likes Kelly? Does Tom like Kelly too? I smell competition. Suspect
Nice add! Yeah. I'm curious about Dougie's dad too.
Update sooon!! cheers cheers cheers
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Post  kaisthelimit on Tue Dec 30, 2008 3:27 pm

Hahahahaha Tom!!! He likes Kelly too? bounce yeah? Why does Dougie's dad called Kelly? this is really exciting!
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Post  PuDd_T on Tue Dec 30, 2008 8:56 pm

OMG!!! i am sooo looking forward to the next chapters!!

WHAT WILL HAPPEN NEXT!?!?!?!!?

sooooo INTRUIGING! hahaha!

this is so much fun to read! clap clap

i like it that Dougie likes Kelly! and i think tom likes Kelly too! hahahaha!! XD

Postpost!!
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Post  nicoleaika on Thu Jan 01, 2009 9:54 pm

baka bukas pa ako maka-update... sorry for the late update ..
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Post  PuDd_T on Thu Jan 01, 2009 10:02 pm

nicoleaika wrote:baka bukas pa ako maka-update... sorry for the late update ..

it's okay Smile i'll be looking forward to it! Very Happy
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Post  nicoleaika on Sat Jan 03, 2009 12:02 am

Chapter 12: Underneath the Color… Same.

Dougie: “I know… it’s weird…”
Leah: “Your home’s inside an orphanage?!”
Dougie: “Yes! But I don’t know how…”
Leah: “Eh?! You don’t know how?!”
Dougie: “Yeah… when I died, our home’s not inside the orphanage”
Leah: “Hmm… let’s go inside.”

They entered the house. Leah’s amazed of the house interior. But Dougie’s not.

Leah: (Stunned) “Wow Doug! Your home’s astonishing. It’s… it’s wonderful. It’s bright. Oh! (Giggles) Oh my God! It’s peach! So cute…”
Dougie: (with doubt) “No way. What happened?! It’s different. Our home’s not this bright. It’s not wonderful, or astonishing. (Pause) And our home’s not peach”
Leah: “Oh? Really? Then this house is not your home?”
Dougie: “No… this is our home because the maroon sofa is still there and our family picture, which was taken so many years ago, is still hanging on the wall behind the sofa and more pictures…”
Leah: (Gazing on the family picture) “Oh my God, Dougie! (Chuckles) you are so cute and sweet in there. Swear!”
Dougie: (Look around the house) “Yeah… I thought so too”
Leah: (Viewing more pictures on the wall) “Oh, so this is your mother. She’s pretty…”
Dougie: “Mum’s always the prettiest girl for my eyes… (Murmurs) Except now, when I saw Kelly…”
Leah: (Laugh quietly) “I heard it Doug. You really like Kelly, huh?”
Dougie: “What? What did you hear?”
Leah: (Smiling) “Nothing”
Dougie: (Still looking around the house) “Oh… hmm… this house really changed a lot. I’m not even sure if this is really our ho…” (Dougie stopped talking)
Leah: “Hey Doug… Why are you stopped talking? What’s up?”
Dougie: (Stopped Leah from seeing what he just saw)
Leah: “Oh, why? What’s in that room?”
Dougie: “We shall call Harry”
Leah: “Wha… What’s happening?”
Dougie: “It’s for you to know and for Harry to find out”
Leah: “Wow Dougie! It’s deep!”
Dougie: (Grabs Leah’s arm) “Nevermind. Let’s go”

They look for Harry… and saw him sitting on a corridor with Tom and Kelly (they’re like resting or something).

Dougie: “Okay, there you are…”
Harry: “What’s up, Dougie?”
Tom: “Oh, Leah and Dougie are there?”
Harry: “Yeah”
Dougie: “Harry, c’mon, you have to see something”
Harry: “What is it?”
Leah: “Dougie seriously said that it’s for me to know and for you to find out”
Harry: “Really? Oh… let’s check it out” (stands up)
Tom: (stands up) “Wait, where are you going?”
Harry: “I don’t actually have an idea… Dougie seriously said that it’s for Leah to know and for me to find out”
Kelly: “Wow… it’s deep”

Dougie smiles

Kelly: “By the way, can I come with you?”
Dougie: “Of course!”
Harry: “Dougie exclaimed of course
Kelly: (Stands up) “Oh… with Tom?”
Dougie: (Immediately answers…) “Definitely no!”
Harry: (laughs) “Dougie really hates Tom… he’s jealous, you know”
Tom: “He doesn’t need to jealous. I and Kelly are just friends. Right, Kelly?” (Sabay akbay kay Kelly—sorry, I dunno what’s akbay in english)
Kelly: (Grins at Tom) “Right. Very close friends. And besides, I think there’s no chance that I and that Dougie will be together. He’s dead.”
Dougie: “You know what Leah… (Pause) that really hurts”
Leah: (Laugh out loud) “Poor Dougie… by the way, can you lead us now?”
Dougie: “Okay. Let’s go…”

And they went to Dougie’s… err… home. Dougie immediately went to the place where he saw something… and all of them were so surprised… Harry gasps, Tom’s jaw drops, Kelly’s eyes widen, and Leah…

Leah: “What the… is it… is it my body? That one inside the colorless, glass-like coffin?”
Dougie: “Yeah…”

All of them were so speechless and pale…’till…

Leah: (Laughs) “Oh my God! Look at me! I did not look like dead! (Laughs) It’s really, really cool! (Laughs)”
Harry: “Hu-WAT?!”
Leah: “What what?”
Dougie: “You saw your dead body… and you laughed”
Leah: (Smiles) “What’s the problem with that? This scene is not right to be dramatic… just look at the walls! It’s bright (Pause)… and peach”
Harry: “Hmm… you’re right…”
Tom: “Wait, what’s happening?”
Harry: “Leah laughed out loud.”
Kelly: “EH??!?!?!?
Harry: “Yeah… she also said that this scene is not right to be dramatic because of the bright, and peach, walls.”
Kelly: “Wow Leah… you are so optimist.”
Tom: “Yeah… and she knows how to face the truth correctly. I really idolize you now.”
Leah: “Aw guys… I’m touched.”
Harry: “She said she’s touched”
Tom: “Oh… welcome…”

Everyone is so happy at that time…

Dougie: “Oh, by the way, Harry, did you guys ask who owned this house? ‘Coz we owned this house… really…”
Harry: “Wait a minute, speaking of house, did I or you guys even ask why her body’s inside this house?”
Tom: “Wait, you’re right. Why her body’s inside this house?”
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  jaschier on Sat Jan 03, 2009 3:19 pm

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good thing dipa na agnas! i wondered her reactions, its like she is crazy! tama ung iba.. wait patay ba talaga si leah.. or it HAS SOMETHING TO DO WITH THE... mouth taped , CURIOUS LANG.. HEHE IM SO EXCITED FOR THE NEXT ONE... but yeah, how come? her body went over the old house of dougie?.. poor dougie, if she can only talk to kell directly... its nice,.. ok update us.. nice one... Approve! Razz
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Post  anika on Sat Jan 03, 2009 3:30 pm

Indeed, why there? COOOOL. The plot thickens!! haha.
Aw... I'd love Dougie even if he was dead already. Razz Razz
And Leah's trying so hard to be optimistic.. Aw... I hope she gets back soon with danny.
UPDATE my friend! this is good! cheers cheers cheers
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  kaisthelimit on Sat Jan 03, 2009 9:16 pm

Aww. Dougie really likes Kelly! I can be Kelly[K for Kristine, E for Erika and L for Liwanag. So that makes it KEL just add and L and Y] Yay me! Razz Kidding!
"For Lhea to know and for Harry to find out" - the epic quote of Dougie! cheers
Rawr Tom! Don't make Dougie jealous! Poor Dougie!
OMG! They found Leah's body! They found it!! *jumps*
Whoa Lhea's really weird. She saw her dead but body and she laughed? scratch
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sun Jan 11, 2009 11:58 am

shucks.. hndi ko pa rin naaupdate.. .sorry folks.. naging busy sa school..
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sun Jan 11, 2009 4:43 pm

Chapter 13: That’s why

Dougie: “Wait! There’s an idea in my mind... What if the guy who called Kelly is my father? And he was like he wants to revenge or something that’s why he’s looking for Mr. Jones and...”
Leah: “Why he called Kelly instead of anybody else?”
Dougie: “I ‘m not sure, but, maybe because our home’s near the orphanage! Her number’s the easiest one to get...”
Leah: “Ahh, you’re a genius sometimes...what about the body?”
Dougie: “The body??”
Harry: “I get it... the body is here because of...”

Suddenly someone opened the front door...

Harry: “Oh no... Someone’s there. We must hide”
Tom: “Where?”
Kelly: (Panicking...) “Maybe inside that cabinet!” (Pointing at a wooden cabinet)

Kelly immediately went inside the cabinet. Dougie followed her. Tom will go in but Kelly accidentally closes the cabinet because she’s so nervous. And then silence.

Kelly: (whispers) “Oh my God, what’s happening? No one’s talking”
Dougie: (To himself) “Oh my God too, I’m inside this cabinet with this wonderful lady”
Kelly: “Oh my God again, it’s so chilly in here, scary...”
Dougie: (Sweating) “I agree that it’s cold in here but I’m sweating, seriously”
Kelly: “What if... Oh no! Is there someone else inside this cabinet? Leah? Dougie?”
Dougie: “Oh my, she got me...”
Kelly: (Quietly laughs) “No... Maybe I’m just the one inside this cabinet. Haha. I’m fooling myself.”
Dougie: “No, you’re not! I’m inside here too...”
Kelly: “Even if Leah or Dougie’s inside, I’ll not able to talk to her or him because I can’t see them…”
Dougie: (Sighs) “What a very unlucky chance…”
Kelly: “Wait, no one’s still talking…”

The door of the cabinet slowly opened… both Kelly and Dougie are scared… and they saw someone…

Kelly: “Oh no… um… hello?”
Someone: “What are you doing there? Go out of that cabinet now… I already know you”
Kelly: “What?”
Tom: “Kelly, go out now… this guy has to say something to us.”
Kelly: “Okay…” (Out of the cabinet…)
Leah: “Hey Dougie, you too…”
Dougie: (Eyes widening) “No way… I’m… I’m…”
Harry: “Shush…just come out now…”
Dougie: “Leah, Harry, (pointing on the someone) that guy… he is my father. I’m freaking, wickedly right! My predictions are right!”
Harry: “IF… that guy, admit so”
Dougie: “Just wait, and listen… I dare you I’m right” (Rises his right eye brow)
Harry: “Oh yeah?”
Dougie: “Oh yeah”
Leah: “Harry, just tell this guy to tell us what he wants to tell.”
Dougie: “Wow Leah! That’s a tongue twister”
Leah: “No, it’s not. It’s just your tongue”
Harry: “Okay… (to someone) Can you tell us now what you want to say?”
Someone: “You know Mr. Jones, right?”
Tom: “We know two Mr. Jones, a father and a son.”
Someone: “The father… the theatre actor.”
Harry: “Wait a minute! Don’t tell me you hate him because he killed your wife and son?”
Someone: “I will not tell you… but I need to tell you, YES”
Dougie: “Strike one, Harry”
Harry: “Geez… wait, are you Dougie Poynter’s father?”
Someone: “Yes again”
Dougie: “Strike two, Harry!” (Laughs)
Harry: “Eeeh.. You called Kelly?”
Dougie’s dad: “Kelly?”
Harry: (Laughs devilishly) “Mwahaha! At last! Dougie’s wrong”
Dougies dad: “Yeah.. I called her because her number’s the easiest one to get since our home’s near the orphanage...”
Dougie: “HAHAHAHA!! I hit the jackpot! HAHAHAHA! I told you I’m right!”
Harry: “Eh?? Fine... but, um... sir, how come your house is inside the orphanage?”
Dougie’s dad: “When my wife and son died, I was really miserable. And then I saw this orphanage. I’m overwhelmed. I love the kids. They make me smile... and then I found out about Kelly. I found out that she knows the Jones. And...”
Tom: “You get her number and you called her and asked her where you can find the Jones...”
Dougie’s dad: “Yeah. You’re right.”
Dougie: “Nah way! I’m the one who thought about it!”
Leah: (Smiles) “What the--- you really want to compete him?”
Dougie: (Breathes deeply) “You know what Leah... I will just get over it. I’m dead. Kelly will never ever like me. For now, it’s all about you...”
Leah: “Aww Dougie... it’s weird, but touching... seriously, touching.”
Harry: “Stop the drama guys.” (smiles) “Let’s just do our mission...”
Kelly: “Oh, yeah, before I forgot, sir, why Leah’s body in here?”
Dougie’s dad: “I want to black mail Mr. Jones’ son so that he will show up and face me.”
Harry: “Ah... and now, what will you do with her body? (Referring to Leah’s body)”
Dougie’s dad: “I will give it to you. You kids take care of her body.”
Leah: “Wait! HARRY! Can you ask him if he kills me?”
Harry: “Oh kay... Sir, I know this question is kind of rude or something... but... do you kill her?”
Dougie’s dad: “Of course not... I once followed Kelly and called her. She went out of her car. And that’s it... I saw her body, I found out that she knows Jones’ son... and it’s already too late when I found out she’s already dead. She’s so cold and so pale.”
Tom: “You’re not going to black mail Mr. Jones anymore?”
Dougie’s dad: “I already killed his wife... it makes me a very bad man but I felt satisfied...”
Kelly: “You’re the one who killed Mr. Jones’ wife?”
Dougie’s dad: “Yeah... by the way, kids, you can take her now... and you can call the police.”

And they get Leah’s body and called the police. Dougie’s father is smiling while the police is getting him in the police car... but yet, this fanfic is still, to be continue...
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sorry folks... mejo magulo talga isip ko ngaun xD
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  kaisthelimit on Sun Jan 11, 2009 4:53 pm

I almost forgot Kelly doesn't see Dougie. I was confused why Kelly wasn't talking to Dougie. Yun pala di niya pala nakikita si Dougie. Haha. Silly me.
Leah: “No, it’s not. It’s just your tongue” --- Hahahahaha Hahaha
Dougie's genius!!!! PBJT!
I thought it was end. Meron pa ba?
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Re: She Falls Asleep (finished)

Post  nicoleaika on Sun Jan 11, 2009 5:25 pm

KAI wrote:I almost forgot Kelly doesn't see Dougie. I was confused why Kelly wasn't talking to Dougie. Yun pala di niya pala nakikita si Dougie. Haha. Silly me.
Leah: “No, it’s not. It’s just your tongue” --- Hahahahaha Hahaha
Dougie's genius!!!! PBJT!
I thought it was end. Meron pa ba?

yeah... I think 1-2 chap.. na lang
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